"Bloody hell, no. Not even as fit as he'd got. Honestly, if Hermione ever wanted to have sex again, she needed to meet some people outside her current set of friends." Oh, yes - something they're all in need of, both in canon and your version!

Loved Harry giving away what he'd been up to with Malfoy - he never did stop to think first...

"Because maybe everything has led to this."  *swoon* - how lovely (if not entirely unexpected) wasn't that? Bravo!

I loved the whole story - Hermione, who was very canon; Millicent, who was wonderfully fleshed out and unexpectedly romantic and bluff at the same time; and all the cameos, especially Rose.

Well done!